I believe that all narratives must have to really show the emotions that the character was having but with a lot of depth to every detail.I believe that every narrative also has to have an intriguing introduction/begining to pull in the reader into the story so they don't get board and want stop stop reading.
I feel like I am good at descriptionbut in this narritive I don't think I showed it much
I believe I need to show emotion even though I think that's what helps make a good story.