This is a story about a 7 year old girl named Kay, and her last day of school.
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Josie
5/18/2012 02:42:43 am
I love it. It's great becuase it is beleiveable but still keeps you wonering. My favorite part is when you said that the mole on her face gave her evil powers.
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Natalie #11
5/18/2012 02:49:21 am
I loved the strong words you used and the awesome details! I could easily paint a picture in my head. Great job once more time! (NAtalie)
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Lucia
5/20/2012 08:39:36 am
I really liked your story because you had so much description and really made it believeable. It really makes you wonder what you would do in the situations Kay was in. And though I can't remember detentions in second grade, I really liked how you put that bit of adventure into your story.
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Maggie
5/20/2012 10:40:36 am
The detail was incredible! The way the naration and dialogue flowed so smoothly made it even more great to read. I love your word choice! Throughout the whole thing I kept remembering things that happened to both me adn Kay. Like being late for school. It made me laugh just thinking about it! Hope you had fun writing it as much as I had fun reading it
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Kylie
6/4/2012 12:31:49 pm
L love the ways you put a ton of detail for one part then another part. I also loved how you made her whisper to herself in the end. You wrote a great story!
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