Good but slow ;o
Journy reminds me of my brother he is a brat just like Journy and I loved all of the dialog in your story and I like how you swiched your voices.
I like how you made Journey original with all of her other brothers and sisters be twins. I think that the best part was when she wiped the toilet.
i like how she has a LOT of siblings
I really liked your story!! I loved when they went to target! I reminded me of my brother!
I love all of the different characters it was very creative.
Write something about yourself. No need to be fancy, just an overview.