I love your awesome showing details you used! I could clearly paint a picture in my head of what was going on in the story. I enjoyed the relationship of all the kids because it reminds me of my family. (Natalie)
I really saw it in my head and it was not talking really fast unlike the others so i could see it better.
You really painted a picture in my head with your great showing details in your story. I really like how the story was realistic, but still very interesting. You did a wonderful job!
Write something about yourself. No need to be fancy, just an overview.