Natalie #11
5/18/2012 02:40:59 am
I really loved your story! I thought you used good showing details. I thought it was cool that you used an eco voice. I can realate because I am not a big fan of airplanes. (Natalie)
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Joanna
5/18/2012 02:44:53 am
Your story is epic!!!!
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Josie
5/18/2012 03:46:43 am
I really liked it because of at the begging how you said "Cateri was getting SICK of the pool" I liked the expession in your voice when you said sick. You said it really loud.
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Lucia
5/20/2012 08:19:14 am
Your WEX Narrative was really interesting because you really showed what Katiera thought. When you got to the part about the alarm clock, I thought Katiera might "wake up" from all the things you described because I can't imagine my mom saying yes right away to a trip to Florida. But that would be really fun.
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Maggie
5/20/2012 11:06:56 am
I love the way the rising actions get more and more intense slowly leading to the climax. Katiera is such a funny character! I can really relate to how she feels about planes, but finally gets over the fact that they are scary to her.
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Kylie
6/4/2012 01:27:07 pm
I loved how you made us see what Katieras life was like in you story. You made a great story!
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Abby
6/5/2012 01:22:35 am
i LOVED YOU STORY!!!!! Every thang i enjoyed. The pool part was funny how her mom let her go to the pool by her self.
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