I really loved your story! I thought you used good showing details. I thought it was cool that you used an eco voice. I can realate because I am not a big fan of airplanes. (Natalie)
Your story is epic!!!!
I really liked it because of at the begging how you said "Cateri was getting SICK of the pool" I liked the expession in your voice when you said sick. You said it really loud.
Your WEX Narrative was really interesting because you really showed what Katiera thought. When you got to the part about the alarm clock, I thought Katiera might "wake up" from all the things you described because I can't imagine my mom saying yes right away to a trip to Florida. But that would be really fun.
I love the way the rising actions get more and more intense slowly leading to the climax. Katiera is such a funny character! I can really relate to how she feels about planes, but finally gets over the fact that they are scary to her.
I loved how you made us see what Katieras life was like in you story. You made a great story!
i LOVED YOU STORY!!!!! Every thang i enjoyed. The pool part was funny how her mom let her go to the pool by her self.
Write something about yourself. No need to be fancy, just an overview.